All you muther fuckers know
I'm a big weenie SO
eenie meenie mine oh no,
Where did all my balls just go?
All my balls just go?
What the fuck?
Don't you know, that I just go
right with the flow so let me go
and reap all of my shit I sow.
Slap a bitch
smack a ho
shit I'd do more
bend her over
till she can touch a toe
fuck her in the butt
since she's a slut,
Oh god damn, this rhythmical
structure is not correct,
and every rhyme I spew,
I love it so much
my penis will just stand erect.
I wouldn't give 2 squirts of piss
so don't read it.
because It's shit.
this shit's so gay
It'll make a homo leaveand not wanna stay.
which is okay,
who the fuck is reading this anyway?
blah blah blah is all I say
and make it rhyme which is okay.
Not it's not, it's third grade junk
like all the shit inside my trunk.
Truth truth truth,
It's all just tongue and cheek.
Truth truth truthIt's what I'll never speak.
I can definitely feel a beat inside my head to this, and it seems less over-thought than a lot of your stuff, but I think the ending needs work.
ReplyDeleteConstructive criticism :)
There, I slapped a bullshit ending on it. WOO!
ReplyDeleteThis sucks.
ReplyDeleteBasic criticism :)
HAHAHAHAH! This was hilarious. But I'm a homo, and I didn't leave...
ReplyDeletethe ending is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteNot criticism:)